1.
Though covered in blood,His father recognised him
-deadtooyoungtoofast.
2.You slipped on the ice
X.Scraping your face on conctrete
-still you look the same.
3. I can't walk by you
X. Without seeing myself there
-with that cup for change.
Though covered in blood,
The first one makes me think of all the kids in a nearby town who have died in accidents. The town seems to lose a number of kids this time of year every year to driving accidents.
ReplyDeleteThough we can be disfigured or damaged by circumstances, we are ourselves. Thanks for these, Edward.
WRiting in Faith: Poems
Wow, number 3 packs a powerful punch. I don't even want to dwell on your first poem... my son is 21 now and I lived through some scary times when he was younger.
ReplyDeleteI especially like the first one. Very powerful. Should be posted at the motor vehicle bureau.
ReplyDeleteAll three are very powerful. The first stays in mind!
ReplyDeleteGreat job with all three. The third is often how I feel...nice capture of feeling.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Edward, I appreciate these haiku for the OSI prompt "bleeding." I also want to say I appreciate your political philosophy! Obama 2008!
ReplyDeleteMy favorite is the last poem. It rings so true and clear. I can feel the fear of slipping into homelessness again.
ReplyDeleteI must say that the third one really reflects what I often see when looking into the too many faces out there.
ReplyDeleteEach cameo view is like a drop of blood spilt - and asks the impossible question of "Why"!
ReplyDeleteGreat write!
Gemma
...3 great impressions of human bleeding
ReplyDeleteI really can relate to the third; there, but for the grace of God, go I.
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